Improving the way my writing sounds

Group 3: Grant Schow, Rakan Alolayani, Ahmed Akhwaher.

 

My Writing sounds choppy, it doesnt flow

• Transitions and linking words

• connect words, sentences and paragraphs.

• show the relationship between ideas.

• indicate the order of things and their relative importance.

• indicate when something new is coming.

• signal to readers how an idea fits in and where it's going.

• show a change is coming, i.e. introduce new ideas

• introduce a summary or a conclusion.

• http://www.openpolytechnic.ac.nz/study-with-us/study-resources-for-students/writing-and-formatting/how-to-write-better/how-to-make-your-writing-flow/

Adding parallel structure

• Thesis statement: A sentence in an essay, report, research paper, or speech that identifies the main idea and/or central purpose of the text.
• Putting the thesis statement in parallel form emphasizes the main ideas into action and give your paper purpose.
• Consider a topic such as "air pollution in Denver, Colorado, USA." If you want to write about the "causes of air pollution" (the controlling statement), your sentence at the end of the introduction could be "...so the objective of this paper is discuss the three main causes of air pollution in Denver which are (1) exhaust from automobiles, (2) soot from industry smokestacks, and (3) smoke from wood burning fireplaces." (Exhaust, soot, and smoke are all nouns which is parallel structure, but in this case, parallel structure is even more effective because the nouns are all followed by prepositional phrases.
• http://eslbee.com/parallel_structure.htm
• http://www.tutorfi.com/LanguageArts/howtoimproveessaywriting

Fix Dangling and msiplaced modifiers

• A Modifier:is a descriptive word that describes a noun or sentence
• Avoid misplacing modifying words
• Example: ‘Sarah was voted prom queen.”
• Correct Format: “The blond girl named Sarah, who was a foreign exchange student from England, quickly climbed the ladder of popularity during her junior year, smiling her way through cheerleading and an ASB presidency term she inched near the top and was a sure fit as junior prom queen.”
• http://www.grammarly.com/handbook/sentences/modifiers/2/what-are-modifiers/

Using Better Vocabulary

• Using the same word over and over again?
• Use a Thesaurus
• Thesaurus
• A thesaurus is a collection of synonyms (words which have basically the same meaning) and antonyms (words which have basically opposite meanings).
• http://thesaurus.com/features/howtousethesaurus.html